I Will Be More

my new life

           I will be more then I am.

 

No more the slave of the sins of my father.

 

I will  rise up to the fight before me.

 

The beginning was his doing the end will be mine.

Author's Note

REST IN PEACE DAD

Reviews

[Ralphy]

The point so clear. Of course you know that the fonts was the first thing i noticed. But the message stands alone even if you didn't use the large fonts. The words flow right to you with an iron clad fist. The past/future seperation "what worked for you doesn't work for me" almost like an fall of idology. Nice write.

[Albert Freeman]

I like it. It's about taking charge of your life and following your goals and dreams. I second logmein!

[logmein]

Strong!

[Enigma]

Whoa!! Powerful poem and defiant at the same time.I agree that the message here is something we don't get to read every day.
Nice write, I'd say...
^_^

[Sally Edwards]

Great write, your assertiveness and positivity towards a new life comes across perfectly in this poem

[justjenn_2u]

I see that this poem talks about definately not looking up to your father. It's ironic, because we are taught to look up to our fathers and to honor our fathers. I guess sometimes it's just not possible. This poem conveys that message to me.