missin jm

i wrote this for my ex

when we were together it was like
i knew you. now its like if i saw you
walking down the street i wouldn't
know what to say because you
seem so different now. i know you
haven't changed any but on the
inside it's like i know nothing about
you anymore and i don't like that
because we agreed to be friends.
it's sorta like when we broke up
i didn't know how i felt anymore
about you or about the world.
i miss your hugs and i miss your
kisses, but, most of all i miss being
your girlfriend. i'll never feel the
feeling i had when i was yours.

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[Writer Boi]

I'm not sure what to say about that. It's expressive but honestly, It's not very good. Try lines that actually have a sentence or part of one each, and capitalize occasionally, like this:

When we were together
It was like I knew you.
Now its like if I saw you
Walking down the street
I wouldn't know what to say because you
seem so different now.
I know you haven't changed any
But on the inside it's like i know nothing
About you anymore
And I don't like that
Because we agreed to be friends.

Even that wouldn't fix it. If you made shorter sentences rather then the run-on ones here, it'd be good, like this:

When we were together
It was like I knew you.
Now its like if I saw you
Walking down the street
I wouldn't know what to say.
You seem so different now.
I know you haven't changed any .
But on the inside it's like I know nothing
About you anymore.
That's not right.
We agreed to be friends.
It's not right.