Vanilla Falls

little poem about a day at the seaside

Vanilla Falls

Sun makes us squint

Tiny finger points

Vanilla please

Dad says, Vanilla! you sure?

Little head nods

Big smiles, then…

Vanilla falls

Vanilla falls

Slow motion splash

Tiny white droplets on sandals

Like tears.

Reviews

[Terpsichore]

Only a few words, but they convey so much of love and a treasured day. T

[David Berger]

Concise yet filled with meaning. I can see this entire scene unfold, and it moved well from one idea to the next. I actually enjoyed, too, that you didn't use quotation marks. I think they would have interrupted the flow of the piece. Nice work!

[Jay Boone]

wow I have only just seen your review David, really appreciate the kind words, regards JB