Shelter

Break up poetry

Shelter

I told you I loved you...

That's not something easy for me to say...

Eventually I got used to you saying it to me...

and it became real

It was us

It was Romeo and Juliet

It was vs. the world!

You cracked...

The wall of my shelter cracked...

and the water came flowing in...

Author's Note

Upset ='(

Reviews

[Jaweena...Eileen Quinta..]

Jayfray, that is good for you to write about your experience. Talking about your experience helps you identify your feelings and where you
"are" now. Process it. "Shelter" definitely showed the pain of lost love. Life is the best teacher... you learn the most from pain-about YOU I think.

[*~DreamDeamon~*]

Can definatley tell you were upset in this.. Very emotional in a short poem..
Good Write

[Libby]

Really good. c:

[Matthew Smith]

Depressing stuff. Good way to vent, though, because it makes the art better.

Good job.

[jjjjjjjjjjjjj]

to go thru a broken heart sucks but dont be sad. it is very good.

[SimplyDelicious]

emotional but worth reading!

I liked it :)

[Casper]

This is really good, but saddening. I like it, and know what it feels like to have a broken shelter.

[Joe Medoff]

very easy to relate to, good one

[Ashley]

aww dont be upset. this was cute

[NickyGL]

i know what you mean by that :( ..... but good poem, sad too.