One life

This poem I wrote recently. It is about the lonlinees I feel as I walk down the street doing the same things over, observing the world. Feeling lost.

 

 

 

One life walking on crowded streets,
Invisible to all, a life is tired and weak.
Countless times this life has been heartbroken
Now no words in the life's heart will be spoken.
An invisble sword pierces the chest.
Look at this life; such a mess.
Knees begin shaking.
No purpose in waking.
Sad eyes looking so blind,
A face aged with the debris of time.
So young but so old,
A hard life taking its toll.
Alone with no friends by its side
A hope that has long died.
This life wakes up with no one,
Wandering in darkness never to see the sun.
One life so alone,
One life wanting love, friends, family, and a home.
 

Reviews

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

Aww this is such a great poem, so much power and care behind every word.. great poem x

[Joiedevivre]

hmm I can really relate to this, really good job in painting this side of life.
Good pacing and I like the rhyme!

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

sad and beautiful many people feel like this me included

[Kiri Nells]

Lots of raw emotion in this one. I enjoyed reading into the feelings portrayed here. Great write :)

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Sad eyes looking so blind,
A face aged with the debris of time.
So young but so old,
A hard life taking its toll.

Love this part of your poem,
This is quite the meotional write.
Very nicely expressed feelings.
Dark and well done!