Down On Earth

If only I could force myself to believe in something I do not.

I would walk with you

There in midair

If it weren't for your secrets.

I would walk with you

There in prayer

If it weren't for your silence.

But because of you and your

Invisibility,

Unreliability,

And speechlessness,

I cannot embrace you.

Do you see me God,

Here on this lonesome earth?

For if you do,

I'd like to know,

Are you hugging me Lord?

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Bah! I absolutely despise commenting on religious poetry (although you DO do a good job at portraying yourself) simply because I could never tell whether 'tis a plea or a stab at belief.

[Riley Bray]

Boy, do I hear you. I wouldn't ever write something stabbing at someone's belief, whether or ont I do or don't agree. This, actually, is my first religious poem and its meant really just to show my skepticism. My entire family, ALL OF THEM, are extremely Christian, while I denied Confirmation due to the fact that I simply consider myself Atheist. (Oh what a struggle that has been, sheesh). Thanks for the review regardless of your opinion on these things though, Tai, for it is always appreciated. :)

[Tai Ryens]

I generally find myself on the path of agnostic atheism despite the same conditions in mine; I know where you come from~

[Riley Bray]

Oh neuroticism in family is absolutely FANtastic isn't it? Aye oy.