drop

reflecting all the world,
risen to the sky, merged in a cloud,
dancing electric, rolling around with the sound of reverberating thunder,
whirled in wetted winds to lay upon the green leaf,
dripping on down, drip d
                                 o
                                 w
                                 n
                                   to a brook meandered
into a rushing stream raging a river,
f
 a
 lling , crashing toward a roiling sea --

the sea, that ancient deep restless sea
           aching for the sky ...



        
                           _                                  
                         (`  ).                   _           
                        (     ).              .:(`  )`.       
                       _(       '`.          :(   .    )      
                   .=(`(      .   )     .--  `.  (    ) )      
       .--.       ((    (..__.:'-'   .+(   )   ` _`  ) )                 
     _(    `.     `(       ) )       (   .  )     (   )  ._   
    (        )      ` __.:'   )     (   (   ))     `-'.-(`  )
   ( `  .  )  )  ( )       --'       `- __.'         :(      ))
    `--(___.-'  (_.'          .')                    `(    )  ))
                             (_  )                     ` __.:'          
              
 ..--^-.----..,___.--,--'`^^,---..-.--+--.,,-,,..._.--..-._.-

Author's Note

-- I do love to Kayak and will be visiting the edge of the world where the broken islands are once again this July -- I'd imagined a drop as reflecting the world and it's course to the sea where we come from and return -- our veins carry the sea and the pH is the same as sea water at 8.5 and there is something of the sea in you and me : reflected fallen to return deep and unfathomable full to the outpouring of salty tears for fears aching to the deep calling the deep --

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

miss you. that is all...!

[Chaos]

I love this piece. I love nature and all of it's wonders and you wrote a piece of it wonderfully. My favorite part of this piece art is how you structured the letters to depict the rain; beautiful.

I read your response to someone elses post and I knew by your simple words that I would love the way you write and I wasn't disappointed.

[C. Harter Amos]

I love how the piece is so smooth and pleasing to read. How do you manage it, that your work stands apart from everyone else's because it seems so effortlessly perfect? I personally don't like "tricks" to spice the writing, but the falling words were perfect to illistrate the traveling drop. It seems to be a mental image surrounded by thoughts and feelings that you simply transport into the reader's mind, hardly needing the words at all. Your Author's Notes are like a second piece on the same page. Beautiful as always.

[Ladysue]

wow, this was just beautifully described. Your imagery was phenomenal in this piece. I absolutely love the last line...the sea, that ancient deep restless sea
aching for the sky ...
This line conveys such meaning and really has a profound feel!!!
Great piece!

[lark]

lol okay... so... i'm digging some of your imagery, "dancing electric" in particular...

... but i'm wondering if you spent more time on the little cloudy thing at the end than the poem itself--i'm wondering if it really belongs there...

haha, but it's nice.

[Sarah]

Wow! I loved this. :) Gorgeous description of both the storm & the sea in chaos because of it. These are both beautiful images, and you captured them perfectly in your words! I particularly love the last line "the sea, that ancient deep restless sea / aching for the sky ..." Interesting! Great job. :D