Unspoken Words

Unspoken Words and feelings

Hanging in the air.

Silence lingering in the darkness,

Loneliness everywhere.

Secret tears keep falling,

Unnoticed through the pain.

Words that you once spoke to me,

Slowly driving me insane.

But we'll continue to close our eyes,

To each others pain and fear,

By leaving words unspoken,

Hanging in the air.

 

Reviews

[Mysty Rayn]

This poem spoke to me. I wish I could explain how deeply it touched me. Thank you so much for writing this and sharing it. What a wonderful explanation of silence and drifting apart.

[Laura E. Aranda]

I had to read it twice and gulp back tears. I know this poem.....all too well....I know this poem.

[Sarah Emily]

i liked it because i get furous occsionly

[Helen Woodward]

This Norma...is a work of art!!!! How many times does this happen, unsaid grievances and feelings of love left unspoken. The reasons are varied like, fear of rejection, shyness or at the other spectrum hatred. On the whole I've found that women tend to be more verbal about their feelings, men don't like to give too much away...just in case there might be something awkward to deal with...God forbid!!!
Love this very much.....

[Angie- Reading As Fast ..]

This happens all too frequently... I guess we think we are avoiding conflict, but in the process, we do so much more damage. This was a true message conveyed beautifully.

[Taja B.]

This is a very nice poem. It is well written and you've shown your emotions quite effectively in this piece. Plus, I can really relate to this topic.

Nice job.:)

[Ghiasquared]

A dear friend sent me here and I can see why. This piece spoke to me, no, more like faint whispers in my ears for so long. I caressed every line in loving embrace because it is so familiar to me. Beautiful .

[Thea M. Joy]

Wow, this sums up everything I'm feeling and going through right now quite nicely. Beautiful poem and going into my favorites!

[Gillzy]

Aww, I know this feeling all too well.

I really liked the rhyme going through it (through is spelt like that though... not thru, sorry, not a fan of text talk. ;) ), it's a pity it didn't stay at the very end too. It would have been a good finish. Although there is chance that it is just my accent doesn't allow "fear" and "air" to rhyme. :/

"By leaving unspoken words," the beat is lost in that line, try "words unspoken".

I love the thought of "secret tears" because they really are, aren't they? That's a lovely way of describing them.

"Silence lingering in the darkness," Makes it seem like silence is a killer, or something evil... which is good... because it can be. Although at other times silence can be golden... ;)

I love this little poem. Very nicely written. :D Thank you x

[Silvia - Scribo, Ergo S..]

very true! some zunspoken words hurt more thsn spoken ones... "silence lingering in the darkness, loneliness everywhere, secret tears keep falling ..." - so sad! and so often true. Relationships can be a very lonely place! xxx