Castaway

My fourth post.

-Castaway-

 

I shared my love,
Only to be filtered by your eyes;
Like your hand takes my wrist-
Dragging me
Into a world of nothingness,
Where I must wander
As a lost breath.

 

Lonely as a firebird,
I must rise from death
And bring my ashes to you.
Because I know no other way
To reach your flame.

 

But if each night I have faded,
Greyed out of your sky dreams,
Then I should not go much further.

 

And we would be like isles,
But it would be on my shores
That you'll read this:

 

"Will you ever love me?
Will you ever love me back?"

Author's Note

comments very much appreciated.
my fourth post.

Reviews

[Randolf Ramos]

It is a scary enough to love and be rejected, but it is life. To be a strong in spirit is a blessing. It is scary still that the one you love sets a standard hard to reach, that it is fear and rejection that creeps in our mind and soul, but this is the essence of life to love and the omnipotent teaches us to love. Ive been on that cycle for long but I truly found love free from blame and I truly appreciate it. It brings me unuttered joy.

Keep it up, Keep on writing!
I got to learn lessons from you!

[Jeff]

I like it and it's so true for many relationships that all of us have or will be in.

[Ruth]

Love is to always take a chance, not always easy! This is a lovely poem that portrays that risk and hesitation well!
xx

[BlueEyedBandit]

I like the amount of emotion this holds without much use of literal examples of emotion.... If that makes any sense what so ever. haha.

[Forever Mine]

This is beautiful! I absoulutly loved it !

[Tina Kline]

This is great, the longing of wanting to be loved but afraid of rejection comes through strongly. This is beautiful in its painful emotions.

[Gracie-San]

This is a very beautiful and honest piece that creates a great emotion and also great visuals. Great work!

[Loner]

Soooooooooooooooo sweet really its a Win , Win!!!

[nono]

Very beautiful i love it.

[dreamer :)]

This is absolutely a very beautiful piece!!! I haven't read something so endearing in a while! It's nice to know that SOME people are still just speaking from their heart rather than from experience! Very good job!

[SimplyDisastrous]

Beautiful.