LUST

for the Alberts Poety Cafe advanced 10/40 words with Tolvi

 

LUST

 

Lust

 

A powerful perfume

Splendid in our presence

 

We kissed into oblivion

 

Unaware a purer heart watched

Through mirrored glass.

 

Broken sobs tore the sky apart

And love for us is not serene.

 

We two should have been more merciful.

 

 

©Copyright jen-JG 7^th August 2008

 

 

Author's Note

anything you wish to say - honesty is good

Reviews

[Laura E. Aranda]

I LOVE it! It is exactly the kind of poem that I like to read. Short and to the point but I am unclear about the message....I'm not sure what the idea is that you are trying to get across...unless you kissed and someone lusted after the kiss they can't get? Is that correct? Cheers, lea

[Tovli]

another nicley written poem complete with plot and an emotional grip. enjoyed. tovli

[Legion]

A deep insight into perspective of a situation. Well done.