Desolation

for Alberts Poetry Cafe advanced 10'40 words with Tolvi

Desolation

 

 

 

Perfume

A splendid presence

In this desolate place

Where oblivion awaits.

Hearts purer than mine quake

Beneath the black glass like sky

My soul is not serene

Yet there are two sides to every story

So please be merciful

 

 

©Copyright jen-JG 7^th August 2008

Author's Note

anything you wish to say - honesty is good

Reviews

[Anarda Nashai]

An "attention grabber" from the very beginning. You write with a humbled voice, which is really appealing. And also, your voice is rich with experience. Thanks for giving my third eye something to look forward to. This is a great piece.

-Anarda Nashai
author of Despondent
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[None]

You create such a mysterious story within your poem of few words. A beautiful creation.

[My Midnight Sun]

"Perfume

A splendid presence

In this desolate place"


The opening lines really caught my attention. This was formed nicely, and very intelligently written. Well done!