I want to write a S****y Love Poem

We've all felt this way.

I want to write a s****y love poem.

 

I want it to drip, sweet and syrup

so sugar stocked it rots your teeth.

And I want the teeth to drop from your jaw.

Because maybe then

I’d find a reason

in that blackened maw,

to love you less.

 

I want to write the poet’s words,

pardon you with Cupid’s arrow

and really I want to kill you dead.

Dead and deader…

so dead that only crows

will break your bones

and suck up all the marrow.

I’d be a simple corpse’s mistress,

and maybe then

I’d love you less.

 

I want to say the things I need,

in your bed, behind your ear,

I want to make you feel your worst,

but you touched me

and I came first.

If I wasn't such a horny mess,

maybe then

I could love you less.

 

I want you to know the hurt I know

the quick, the core, what lies below,

but I can no more tell the truth

than show the love I have to prove.

I cannot kill what makes me fly

I cannot save what makes me die.

I cannot rage inside your sight,

I cannot lie down to sleep at night.

I cannot hope to convalesce

 

I really wish I loved you less.

Reviews

[gabrielle]

Though the rant and the feeling are so real, it's deliriously hilarious. I could not stop laughing. A favorite random read!

[Coyote Poetry]

It is a amazing love poem. I like the real language and emotion. The ending was perfect.
"I cannot kill what makes me fly
I cannot save what makes me die.
I cannot rage inside your sight,
I cannot lie down to sleep at night.
I cannot hope to convalesce"
I like the above lines. They could lead me to create my own poem of love. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Moonie]

It made me laugh. Such a new twist to the old school love poems. My favourite lines would be:
"Because maybe then

I’d find a reason

in that blackened maw,

to love you less."

In my library! :)

[New Theory]

This was a great write indeed, loved each and every line of this. Made me fall in love again. :D

[Savannah Bly]

I love this! It's beautiful, dark, and funny. It's relatable and real, and full of raw passion and bursting emotion! Great job! :)

[Frieda P]

Darkly entertaining and funny...yep, all been there.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

- Love the flow of this poem.
- Very creative.
- You definitely have a way with words. :-)

Kaze~

[Jennifer Johnston]

Thanks for the read!

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[Matching Socks]

The humour is this is wonderful, poetry is such a great outlet for wishing your exes (or currents) dead.
The message still comes across strong however. Great poem. :)

[Jennifer Johnston]

Thanks so much! And I agree...damn them all for being them :)

[C. Rose]

Congratulations!
This piece made it to the top ten out of 373 other submissions of the "Promote Me! (Again)" contest.
For making it this far, if you submit this piece to the "Promote Me!" group library, then I will accept it into the library.
If you win the voting phase (which closes 7/18/14) then your piece will be featured on the "Promote Me!" group and other such promotions.
Link to group is: http://www.writerscafe.org/groups/Promote-Me%21/11216/

So, If you like this piece follow the following link and vote for it!
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Promote-Me%21-%28Again%29/50038/

I chose this piece because it had strong organization and was both "witty and wry" and "gooey and gory". Well done.

[C. Rose]

Boom. This piece is now in 94 more RR lists as your reward. I really wish I had 6 more friends so I could say 100.

[Jennifer Johnston]

This is wonderful news--thanks so much!