First Contact

you are dreaming
hand tucked innocently under your cheek
i want to steal a page from shakespeare 


                           - mack daddy of all lotharios,

 

                               the man had game before the players called it game

 

    and we all just knew it as love -


oh! to be the hand that gets to cradle your cheek


my mind is teeming
with a million needtoknowNOW questions


where do dreams go between the dreaming..
how do sunsets make you feel..
or ice cream..

what do you reach for when alone and lonely..


a million inconsequentially important queries


but the two that are keeping me awake
in feverish delerium -


how the warm hollow scent
hidden beneath your ear
would feel against my nose


and


oh! to be the hand that gets to cradle your cheek

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Marvellously playful with a hint of hunger, actually more than a hint, 'Feverish delerium' is beyond a hint! Ach, and the notion of the nose finding out the answer to the key question gives the poem a pleasantly startling tangibility. Contrasting this with the smaller curiosities serves to underscore its primacy.

[Crowley]

Oh to be the one that would hold you so rapt....must be something special indeed. This is really the perfect description of intellectual longing soon to be enveloped by physical desire. Physical in the sense of a need to touch and feel and inspect that which we desire. There are lines in here to die for and there are lines in here that hit like the smell of your favorite loves cologne, bringing hints of what is sure to come if we behave ourselves. Wonderful.

[Goddisia]

intense and light

"how the warm hollow scent..." - so intimate and beautiful
you threw me right into a whirlpool of memories :)

[Iota]

Now I am smiling still, this is wonderful!! and it is fun just like when you first meet someone special that impacts you. "Warm hollow scent" such great images and expressions in this one that all run quickly as we read like the time flies when you encounter a kindred spirit. Love this poem!

[Periac]

"what do you reach for when alone and lonely."
such beautiful wants.....a beautiful stairway for clever stanzas

while the 2 questions you fever over of brilliance and charm....

whats odd is i liked this so much i actually stumble here in my review.....i wonder
what does a mediocre poem from your collection even look like

[Sorry Infamous]

This was wonderfully written. It is a secret intimate place we go in dreams, and we can only hope our lovers meet us in sleep. Creative, something I have been reflecting on for awhile, seems you have beaten me to the punch. Bravo.

[Colin Mitchell Williams]

There is a very tactile quality in the way you write... it reaches in and imparts a sense of yourself to the reader.... unusual, fluid and intriguing

[Eagle Cruagh]

A fairly graphic picture of need.

Sensuous, arousing and the texture
is felt in the heat of the mind.

My rating -----100 %

------ Eagle Cruagh

[Sean M. Addams]

like the imagery you have put into this flow is good in this too... overall a very impressive piece...