carnation cravings.

for Devons' Picture This group

razor blade hips

dangerously tinged lips

and a shirt cut way down to

there

she captures you

enraptures you

hits you with her james bond

stare

she'll drain you

inflame you

a deer in headlights, lost in the

glare

panic, little rabbit, 

there's no time to run

you're already caught in her

snare

Reviews

[c.m.]

I like this one a lot...the rhyme is nice, and I love how the ending words stick out from the rest.

"razor blade hips
dangerously tinged lips
and a shirt cut way down to
there"

I love that part....genius. I love the razor blade hips line, and if you say lips in a poem or song, I swoon. Very nice piece.

[reminder]

I love the rhythm of the lines. The words are raw and aggressive. It pumps me up! Very cool!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I love this poem. It is so lyrical thats its just not funny.
This would make a great song. Definitely a hit!

[Moonflower]

This was strong..almost aggressive, I think the rhyme flowed well and seemed subtle and well placed. The first stanza really set up the mood and tone of the piece. Excellent job, dear. :)

[Dale Pavolko]

I think (bond girl stare) would be more apropos. but maybe that is just because I am
a guy. And If I got a James bond stare from someone I would probably punch 'um.
The way u have formated this I like or I could say your use of white space greatly
enhances the verve of the poem and gives it a flare it would not otherwise have.

[Wildfleour]

Love the way you put the ink to paper - rhyme or no.

[Aven]

james bond stare... few women possess that... few men as well for that matter! very strong write!

[Linear]

BRAVO on not only the rhymes, but the story you told inside your exquisite poetry, and o so true, how many times i have been held in that special womans light

[Fran Marie]

A rockin' good poem~ i especially like the James Bond line~ Nicely donE!

[Nobody.]

hmmm. pleasantly devious. nice rhyme scheme. sexy and dangerous.
yep....I think this kicks a*s.
cheers!