Underneath the smile

Dedicated to a certain person in my life, whom I love dearly, yet am never able to impress.

Scars decorating my wrists and knees,

Hidden wounds beneath my skin

The deepest torment ails the heart.

With each passing pulsation,

A pang of heartbreak strikes.

 

Unshed tears veil blue eyes,

With fists clenching tight against skin.

Nauseating emotions engross my being,

I withdraw into myself once more,

Disappointment leaking from every pore.

 

Why can’t you see that everything I have done has been for you?

 

 

 

Author's Note

Constructive criticism is always appreciated.

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

This flows smoothly and your words reflect your intent very well. Sometimes people see the truth, but act like they don't because they don't feel the same way and don't want to hurt your feelings. I hope that isn't the case here. I wish you much happiness.

[Wondering Mind]

Tormenting sentiments tear at the reader. Indeed a sad write. I can’t comment on the Love, for love has it’s own mind.

[nigrum homonculus]

very raw and emotional. felt it more as i read on. and i love the honesty in the last line. just completely finishes the poem off beautifully. well done. i loved it

[Lizbeth]

A lot of despair in that poem.
It makes the reader wonder wonder why one stays in a relationship where there is such pain and sadness.
Good luck with your writing!
Lizbeth

[Harley (arbiter)]

Well I like it. The feeling in the poem and wording all comes together. Keep trying. Sometimes ll it takes is the leap of faith