I Don't Have A Car

about not having transport!

I don't have a car

I don't get very far

I have no place to go

I've got two small feet

they hit the pavement

               they hit the street

but I've got a condition

I've got no Expedition

Reviews

[alifeacoustic]

Small feet make heavy work of pavements, especially when underlying conditions add further weight. I dont drive, but luckily we have great public transport here. Just as well really or I would starve :)
Hope the condition and vehicle issues right themselves soon :)

[Chris]

If this really is about transport the tongue-in-cheek last line is cute.

If its about life as you are living it ...it's poignant and relate-able.

[jesserose99]

well, I don't have a car at the moment...and also am dealing with a nerve condition that makes me feel like I have no place to go, and my car so to speak is broken...so it is a bit of a double entendre...is that what you would call it?

[Chris]

I'ld call it real... but that's me - chuckling here

[jesserose99]

i suppose it is all around. lol

[redzone]

ahhh... so how about a cruise then?? you could have an "expedition" and wouldn't need a car... good deal huh??!! and feet, they would come in handy I think.. I don't have a car either, but living in NYC and you don't need one and definitely feet come in very handy... enjoyed your whimsical poem..

redzone

[Samuel Dickens]

This whimsical, entertaining little poem reminds me of when I was a wheel-less teenager. Back then, my constant thoughts were of cars, girls, and cars. No car--no girl. No girl--no fun. Ugh.

[jesserose99]

Thank you for your review Samuel...very funny!

[Cassie]

hahahah...I also dont have a car, i dream of driving a landcruiser, a big car maybe but I only got two small feet..the best blessing and eyee..I loose the extra pounds by using my two small feet

[jesserose99]

lovely way with words Cassie...and beautiful picture to go off the subject!! Thank you for your review!

[Lydia Shutter]

Not sure I like the double negative....they just rub me the wrong way. Still, the sing songy tone of this is cute and I liked the last line....Expedition having a double meaning. Lydi**

[jesserose99]

Thanks Lydi...appreciate your review...maybe I don't have a car...what do you think?

[Lydia Shutter]

A car OR a place to drive it? Not sure, but I liked the question.

[youngkingkwan]

Great flow, quick and simple.

[Jacob Clifford]

Heh, this is short and sweet. I like the rhythm this has.