Untamed

rising of the spirit

 Breath of fire, be my desire
help me rise a little higher
 
Wings of free
wrap around me
help me to finally see

The truth through the flames
the wild heart untamed

Reviews

[SariahM]

I love it! all I suggest is that you make it a little longer... Keep adding stanzas, and It will be perfect.

[fierceauthor]

Can you write a long one just for me? I love your writing jesserose99!

[jesserose99]

Your reviews have been too sweet!! I will write a long one and just for you!! I am not really familiar with the form but will give it a go. You are too kind. i plan on reading your story's today because your poem was lovely!

[fierceauthor]

APPRECIATED And wish you the very best on your pen journey

[Chris]

Is souls meant as a singular possessive? Or is it more than one soul? I feel confused with how sire fits within the frame.

The first stanza doesn't "feel" as if it belongs here - it more defines a state of being that may better serve as a precursor to the actual poem. The Heat of the remaining intent - is evident, well tied, readily understood and quite standalone.

[jesserose99]

I love it when someone makes me think about my poetry...I never mind the good old axe if it makes it better. Thank you Chris! Your a gem!

[Chris]

Nicely done...

[redzone]

we need more wild hearts untamed!!

redzone