A Flower

I need your mouth
Like it was meant to be on mine
Like our lips were petals from the same flower

Softly kiss me in the night
Softly kiss me in the morning
A rose for a rose of your lips

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I am in love with the first stanza. I like your simile and the overall tone of the poem. It is very tender and romantic, but it has a sultry undertone. In a way, this piece reminds me a bit of Pablo Neruda's work.

I do think the first stanza is stronger and that you could build a bit more on that or expand the idea a tad more.

I want to live in a garden of your kisses....

That came to me while I was thinking about how you could expand this piece.

I like your work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"a rose for a rose of your lips"

quite a nice line, really brings this fine piece together...

nothing like really good kisses.

[Jessica Jean]

Very true :)

[zainul]

Wonderful thought on romance.
I feel a rosy fragrance around.