Drive

Multiple cinquain

These days
I live in an
apartment building, in
and amongst many parking lots.
Sometimes

I walk
through them, as some
wander through their own lives.
I don't live out of my car, but,
sometimes,

I do
depend on my
inner drive to get to
my ultimate destination --
or, at

least, to
get to the next
intersection on the
way. Dusk is falling; I'd better
head home

for the
night. Tomorrow,
I know, I'll realize how
long I've been on my own life-road --
could be

it's time
I headed out
of my inner city
and began that LONG road trip we
all face.

Reviews

[M. L. F.]

It's deep. That is a great place to start, with depth. I like the breaks and the meter so far. It added interest and rounded out the emotions... Thank you for sharing.
..Misty

[Bodine]

RE 'a great place to start': where might I go from there? Do you think it needs to be longer, or shorter,
or rewritten at all? In the third and sixth stanzas, I was trying to convey -- address -- not so much death as creative enterprise, and the point at which we ask ourselves what we want to do with our lives, and -- hopefully -- decide it's something good, and something constructive (just as I've done in deciding on a career in poetry).

[Bodine]

"so far"...? You don't think it's quite finished yet? Maybe you do! Can you give me a bit more of, or a bit longer, critique?

[Bodine]

May I ask you what you DIDN'T like about it?

[M. L. F.]

Awww... No, I've been away writing away.. I'm so so sorry for the slow response! Idk if you know MBTI personality testing? Carl Jung? Colleges use it in their aptitude / career centers.. Well.. I happen to be an INFJ, and we word ourselves weird at times.. esp during small talk, so forgive my saying it in a way that sounded as though it felt or sounded unfinished. When what I meant was, that Starting with depth, the way that you did, is ALWAYS a great way to start! ;) It's quite good... I can't see what I would change tbh. :)

... Misty

[Bodine]

Tell me more about MBTI!

[M. L. F.]

Lol! Ok... what do you wanna know? Here are links for two great tests! This stuff helps you learn yourself soooo much... Incredible.

First one.. test my college gave me in the career aptitude center, 62 questions:

http://www.humanmetrics.com/cgi-win/jtypes2.asp

next is a good test which also gives your Enneagram:

102 questions :)

http://similarminds.com/embj.html

Any questions ask! Wonder what you are!

Good luck!! Interesting stuff...