After

Forgive to forgiven

Blazing,
Thrashing,
Bashing,
Anguish,
Trembling in rage,
and agony.

Kneeling before,
the flame of heart
crowned with thorns.
Sick and sore,
Am I greed?
To ask for one more day,
spending with loved one.

She lit the candle,
fire the despair,
that so long held.

the hope replace,
saying the soul,
there is true place
after life.

Reviews

[Lorry]

I get the feeling from your words that the flame of heart in rhe second verse was a candle, which you later confirmed in the third.
It almost sounds like a prayer , wishing, hoping that you could have one more day together before that flame is extinguished.
Nicely done.

[Jeyanthi]

Yeah...
I thought of writing about phoenix but you already choosen it so I thought about candle. In second verses "flame of heart crowned with thorns" is Almighty... it says flame can't be hold but can be put off... like love...
In third verse it's candle 🕯 giving light and hope but goes off.... "place" after life (which we will never know or even be told of😅)
I want to signify nothing is permanent in this world in this poem verses...
Thanks for your time, review and your prespective, you got it right ... 😇🙏

[Vol]

Jeyanthi,
It seems love is always "A heart crowned with thorns."
Vol

[Jeyanthi]

If only love resides in the heart then yes.
Thank you sir 🙏..

[Dave W.]

Absolutely fantastic, you say so much with so little, this level of craft is what I am work towards.

[Jeyanthi]

Thank you 😀...
That's more for a writer in me 😅...

Hear the wispers of your wavering thoughts, work with pen, paper and your soul...but provided daily...
Keep writing!! Or Typos ...

[emmajoygreen]

There is, for me, almost an urgency in your words. A need to express the deepest feelings, a secret sent to the One and Only trusted one. Maybe there is a plea for being allowed to say what and how your heart feels. These letters feel their use, Jeyanthe.

[Jeyanthi]

Yeah...
Sick days and pleasing goes together always...
Thanks for the review...

[emmajoygreen]

Only too pleased to say whatever.. .. smile.

[Jeyanthi]

Then, I can have a big smile 😀 😄

[emmajoygreen]

Smiles are all things bright and beautiful?!

[Jeyanthi]

and sending it all our way,
to give glow ✨️!

[emmajoygreen]

Yessssssssssssss!

[Jeyanthi]

Bless
Our soul,
If that make senses,
let it flow..

[emmajoygreen]

you're on the wing today.. all sorts in mind, perhaps plans laid and an adventure in sight?!

[Jeyanthi]

Plans
not go as plans,
face all sorts
of adventurous,
dare to take flight
without fright...

(That was old usual me,
now, no time for me,
so sad me
shy at old me. .... OK that was not really intended 😅)