THE DANCE

Another contest entry with a two line prompt... enjoyed this though... it took me places I wasn't sure I was going to go... always a joy when that happens.

THE DANCE

By: JB Murray © april 2010

 

 

As lightening shone and thunder blew
I danced the dance that dancers do

I shudder, speak, whispers drawn

With breath of lovers long since gone

 

As lightening fell and thunder screamed

I danced the dance that dreamers dream

Of yesterdays and those now lost

A soundless cry, the fiery cross

 

As lightening lies and thunder truths

I danced the dance that lovers use

On velvet sheets, a sinner’s kiss

A promise falls from broken lips

 

As lightening steals and thunder shakes

I danced the dance that jesters fake

The jeers the smiles the hollow laughs

All forced beneath this actors mask

 

As lightening fades and thunder sleeps

I danced the dance the dying keep

Under fallen leaves where darkness looms

I lay eternal where flowers bloom

Author's Note

As always... I hope you ejoy...

Reviews

[Bob Davies]

Fantastic rythym and flow, I love the imagery, especially where it darkens near the end and adds an interesting contrast between death and the brightness of blooming flora :)

[Platus]

This is a very nice poem, easily the best one in the contest. You have great talent.

[darkgurl]

I really enjoyed the 2nd stanza to the last. Love the part of the dance that Jesters fake, and the mask of the actors. This is very well written. I would love to hear this to music.

[Norma M Sutton]

I like this. It has a nice flow and rhythm to it.

[beautiful disaster]

absolutely amazing.....i love it!