The Window

Another contest entry... a glimpse into Inevitability...

THE WINDOW

By: JB Murray © May 2010

 

 

THE LEAVES ARE FALLING AGAIN

ONE BY ONE

A FLUTTERING OF CONCIOUSNESS

IDEAS GONE BAD

ROTTING AWAY FROM THE CONCEPTUAL TREE

FLOATING ON A STOLID BREEZE

ALMOST RELUCTANT TO LAND

RELUCTANT TO FADE AWAY

 

THEY HANG ON THE WIND

GASPING FOR BREATH

FEARING THAT WHICH THEY CANNOT CHANGE

THAT WE ARE ONLY LEAVES

FALLING TO OUR END

WHILE WE STARE THROUGH MUDDIED PANES

HUNG ON RUSTY FRAMES

THESE WINDOWS OF OUR LIFE

Author's Note

Hope you like it... don't forget to leave me some feedback... I can take the good with the bad... thanks!

Reviews

[beautiful disaster]

I like this alot. Life is how you say it......it is what it is.......and in the end everyone has the same fate no matter how many times you try to change your destiny.

[JB Murray]

Stolid... similar to stagnant... lifeless...

[darkgurl]

STOLID BREEZE, if I may what is Stolid?
I like this write and the refernce of window to life.
Very well written I like this alot.

[Sasha]

I like the comparison of humans -> death to leaves -> falling to the ground. Trying to catch the wind when your fate is inevitable. The last three lines got a bit abstract for my taste. I suppose I understood what you were trying to get at, but the way you said it left me confused.
Overall, it's good.