Searching

I look past the stone you’ve become,
looking for a fleshly spirit but I find none,
I scream come alive, but you don’t budge,
I trudge under the sun, howl in tears under the moon,
but still I can’t find you,
falling asleep I travel my dreams
into nightmares,

tearing into night terrors,
Where are you? You left your body beside me,
and I think it’s on auto pilot because every once in awhile
it blinks and mechanically says” I love you  ”
So I continue my search in hopes that one day I’ll find you again,
Hold you in my arms and ask, where have you been? I’ve looked everywhere.

Reviews

[Matt Hope]

Thanks, but I'm not sure what you mean, could you give me a sample?

[Kelsey Schadt]

oooh the emptiness is haunting in this piece. One suggestion I would make is to put quotes here
I scream, "come alive," but you don’t budge,
and
Hold you in my arms and ask, "where have you been? I’ve looked everywhere."
I suggest this because you used the quotes around I love you.

[Matt Hope]

you mean the quotation marks?

[Kelsey Schadt]

yep, sorry for not being clear.