discernment

05/2011

you are my casualty, your eradication

my sojourn in your country 

has brought about my descent 

falling from your smothering embrace

your pallet of a thousand stakes

my surface dies underneath your taste

this com-mixture was difficult to fathom

but I will believe in you now, now that its over

now that its murder 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Layla J Omorose]

I love the last line of this poem and I enjoyed the entire poem. There's nothing better to me than a short poem with a lot of meaning. "You are my casualty, your eradication" strong and powerful opening line. I couldn't help but think of total chaos and destruction. And cause and effect. Very good poem.

[♥ Kinnixk]

I love the second stanza. It's very vivid and it's in the reader's face. Very good :D

[M.E.Lyle]

Yikes, this freaks me out. The vividness sends chill bumps down the spine.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

the second stanza is my favorite

[olla]

oh yes.. very nice.. murder with class..

[Victoria Elizabeth]

I love it!!! you normally don't find writing like this!!! Very good, I'm impressed!

[Nobody.]

You know I dig this. :)
Raw, severe, in the reader's face.
My kinda poetry bro.
Solid stuff.
Cheers!

[☢ZoMbIeS sLaYeR&#..]

this is amazing, i can tell you feel soo much :) good job! keep writing :)

-Shelby ^^

[Octob3r Star]

Imagery is awesome

[rivers]

Joshua...your depth of emotion seems limitless. Understanding of all types can be a blessing and a curse.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good write. It was entertaining for me. Last line stuck out to me...hmm murder in the first degree. Thanks for sharing. :)