discernment

05/2011

you are my casualty, your eradication

my sojourn in your country 

has brought about my descent 

falling from your smothering embrace

your pallet of a thousand stakes

my surface dies underneath your taste

this com-mixture was difficult to fathom

but I will believe in you now, now that its over

now that its murder 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Layla J Omorose]

I love the last line of this poem and I enjoyed the entire poem. There's nothing better to me than a short poem with a lot of meaning. "You are my casualty, your eradication" strong and powerful opening line. I couldn't help but think of total chaos and destruction. And cause and effect. Very good poem.

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

very gangster, different!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Interesting short write, i like the ending, it has a impact.

[Jeremy Baker]

Many different layers of meaning here - very well crafted!

[Muse]

I reread this 3 times. And each time I see a different metaphor, a different meaning. Now that it's murder...you've washed your hands clean! What a thought-provoking write!

[Coyote Poetry]

The words strong and direct. Each set of lines can stand on their own. I like the beginning. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Rene Velez]

enjoyable and a spiral of a poem.

[Jazique]

That was a nice poem not in a sense but, deep with a little rhyme flow for such a short poem that spoke so much with a very extensive vocabulary. Anyways well done I really like this. (to my library.)

[Shep]

Love the poem with wisdom to all that read between the lines. Nicely done.

[Amila Jay]

A very catchy poem:)

[Megan]

Vague but I like it :) last stanza kicked a*s and the flow is impeccable as always! Brilliant write Joshua, thanks for posting this..I love reading your stuff