discernment

05/2011

you are my casualty, your eradication

my sojourn in your country 

has brought about my descent 

falling from your smothering embrace

your pallet of a thousand stakes

my surface dies underneath your taste

this com-mixture was difficult to fathom

but I will believe in you now, now that its over

now that its murder 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Layla J Omorose]

I love the last line of this poem and I enjoyed the entire poem. There's nothing better to me than a short poem with a lot of meaning. "You are my casualty, your eradication" strong and powerful opening line. I couldn't help but think of total chaos and destruction. And cause and effect. Very good poem.

[Dark Beauty]

great write,excellent words and the last stanza rocks,nice job

[Thea]

Short but striking!
"but I will believe in you now, now that its over
now that its murder "
:)))
Amazing! ♥ it!

[Desmund Tiny]

A heartfelt poem. I like it.....especially the last stanza...... ^^,

[Maggie]

Love this, it rocks!!!

[Dream Weaver]

Great placement of words,
the last stanza was killer my friend!

[Sher{alynn} Veron{ica}]

viva la joshua :)

[WatashLegend]

strong poem, you flowed nicely. This was awesome : "this com mixture was difficult to fathom but I will believe in you now, now that its over now that its murder"

[Chris]

Like Elijah, I too will spend the night musing about this poem's true meaning.

I usually like criticizing something of each piece that I review, but this is too good to do so.

[Omar Fendri]

'smothering embrace' adore this one.
This has a taste of creation and shows a really vast imagination.
demands rereading.