to and fro

08/2011

                                            I never understood you

                                   I've never really understood anybody

                                      I stand alone and I will die alone 

                                       at the end of this empty walk

                                  slowly kissing the cold lips of death 

                                  while sitting in this corner of my soul 

                              allowing the darkness to wash through me 

                      you will see it in my eyes but you will never understand

                           what it's like to wither like leaves in the fall

                             to be tossed to and fro by a swirling breeze

                             taken off course, completely out of control 

                      crashing only to be crushed on the unforgiving ground

                           

 

Reviews

[sugar]

Wow this was just so powerfull and emotional
It was dark but in a beautifully written way
Bravo
My fav line "while sitting in the corner of my soul" that line really hit home with me.
I just love your writing, and this poem is fantastic! keep it up!

~sugar~

[InkSlinger]

Melancholy and emotional, the feeling of anger and frustration rage though your words, yet I get the sense of determination and resolve here too.. Like a line in the sand.. I stand alone, and I WILL DIE ALONE.. overall a good dark moody piece of writing!!

[Pebbles]

really feel this right now well done love it :)

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

dark and sad
I loved it

[Alicia Hirshey]

Oh my gosh. I love this.

[Shalini Dinesh]

very beautiful poem, so deep with emotions and quiet sad.... the metaphors are admirable, I liked these lines much

I stand alone and I will die alone
at the end of this empty walk
slowly kissing the cold lips of death

[Juliet]

" you will see it in my eyes but you will never understand"

This poem is excellent. I really how expressive it really is without it being two pages long. It says a lot. I love the line I copied above. :) Great, heavy writing. You are so far one of my fav. poets on here.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem with some good questions create by your words. I believe few people will understand us in a life. We allow few to see who we really are. Can be scary to allow someone in to see your strength and weaknesses. I like the strong ending to this outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Alexander Mccarthey]

I absolutely love the imagery that you used in this poem. It does what poetry does best which is to describe feelings and situations in new ways allowing the reader to step into the writer's pov. Probably the best line in this poem is the fifth one, where you said "slowly kissing the cold lips of death."

[Tasha]

This was so strong and powerful.
"I've never really understood anybody
I stand alone and I will die alone "
I really liked it.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Thea]

It seems poignant...Anyway, I like it... :)))
"I've never really understood anybody
I stand alone and I will die alone "
Aw.... :(