starlit

08/2011

                                    It's so hard to tear myself

                                      out of your tantalizing 

                                         hold, away from

                                      your soothing touch

                                     and take the long

                                     walk back to where

                                   I live which isn't home 

                                     my home is with you

                                   inside your pleasant

                                     gaze, forever locked

                                   into mine, stare at me

                                     my glorious lover

                                  so I can remember your

                                     elegant face and 

                                     your starlit eyes

                                      as I return to

                                       this nightmare

                                         without you

Author's Note

thanks to ivizarx for an edit help on this one..xx

Reviews

[Spookers]

OMGness! I adore this poem. So many people have felt what it is like to be away from a lover, and I believe you summed up the emotions very well

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a great write. I really enjoyed it. I could relate, but I think anyone could relate to this. I loved it. Thanks for sharing.

[Adalynn]

I can relate i was away from my love on for a long time. I love your work

adalynn

[Etoiles]

I love that line:
'my home is with you'.
I know the feeling.
Great write.

[Seshat Nidaba]

I felt myself to be the experiencer in this, that to me is delicious reading.

[Amy Bumpas]

Love these lines: gaze, forever locked
into mine, stare at me
my glorious lover
so I can remember your
elegant face and
your starlit eyes
as I return to
this nightmare
without you

[MickeyM]

amazing

[MickeyM]

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Heart tearing and touching piece... i love the feeling and captured emotions in this write in such a small space you wrote in. Love this a lot.

[Hayley]

Best line is your starlit eyes.. It just gives this poem the perfect surreal quality.