deadlock

08/2011

                                  The storm rages outside as I lay

                                    motionless in this twisted joke of a bed

                                     and the great war wages in my mind

                                     Lighting cracks and thunder crashes

                                    as the winds shakes this feeble abode

                                   all I can see is the wraith in my face

                                   Flashes reveals its form and the 

                                    menacing creatures that are crawling

                                      dazed I am held within their limbo

                                       I wish I could rip myself from their

                                     wires that are attached to my body and

                                    take a fresh breath of uncontrolled air

Author's Note

Thanks to Muse for an edit help on this one...xx

Reviews

[((Teenage_Poet_Loser))]

i was reading this and the band as i lay dying, i dont know if you know them, poped into my head! if you expand this make a cool chorus it hink they will actually be stunned by this!
i liked it! it was short to the point and easy to read. So i liked it a lot =] thanx for the share! great work

[Muse]

dazed I am held me in their limbo
try instead............. within their limbo?
I could feel the barbwire tearing my skin with this poem! Nicely done!

[kurdapiaful]

there's more to life :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Wow, this is a snapshot of mental hell as seen from the outside. Powerful, heavy stuff.