dearest naive

09/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Seven)

Screams echo out into the streets

terror laced sound waves detonating

off my decaying eardrums

I am a shadow of my former self

standing over you in this dark alley

scenery wilts around

the death that seeps from my skin

the pores leaking poisonous sweat

dripping on the ashen ground

Beware of a kind face and a

pristine stare, it could be just

a mask that I wear

                     more screams 

you should have listened to 

your friends...

Reviews

[Omar Fendri]

you know, the third stanza has an utter intensity...the words you used hold a super power related to death, decease and anarchy. It really adds to the whole poem a darker feeling. well, It is very well-expressed and your words were exactly screaming out loud. Love it from the beginning to the end.

[Desmund Tiny]

I LOVE it!!! this poem is well-expressed as if it was kiryuu's thoughts. and the picture... it's Kiryuu Zero.... ^^, nice
anime ........... thanks for sharing

[Dark Beauty]

Love it,great write and your word choice was good!!!

[Violetta Alexis]

I love that word, ashen. I have used that word in my "Black Market" poem.

You always seem to speak my hearts voice. We may or may not have been cut from the same cloth. :)

You deserve your own poetry book, sweety. Keep writing. I'll damn sure always be here to read it.

[Jazique]

I just loved the poem the darkness that withered through out the words in such a flow and I knew that was zero from vampire knight and nice video to go with a great poem. Seems perfect to go in that dark poems contest. Anyways I like the way you wrote this with the description of him himself and the emphasis on the screams. Well done and thanks for the review earlier.

[Lily Mae]

This is great and creepy and I love it:) xx

[Kaylor Mason]

This one is great in its darkness and undercurrents. I like that part "you should have listened to your friends"--I especially like this because, coincidentally, I just read the first manga issue of Vampire Knights . . . I just might get the anime set. Looks really interesting :)

[SabrinaThePoet]

This is interesting. i like it.

[Muse]

sound waves detonating
off my decaying eardrums
It's just a mask that I wear! I have too many favorite lines. Scary!!