carcinogenic wonderlands

12/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Ten)

Another cold and baneful night sets 

around my detrimental mindset

taste iron crimson raindrops

as they fall from winters sky

 

the darkness is deleterious as  

carcinogenic wonderlands rise

in concord with the moon that 

shows red splashed landscapes

 unrelentingly 

                   

slashing the throats of my rivals

and smearing their coating warmth 

underneath my dry eyes so that I 

too may cry blood

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[EMF]

A stunningly dark and atmospheric write that created a sea of images. Especially of blood tears. This is one of those poem that has used language with such care and precission that the images will stay in the mind throughout the day. Beautifully dark and delerious. Superbly crafted wether read to oneself or read out loud. Great job

[Arielle Ann]

Rich usage of vocabulary....intense description...and I harbor an affinity towards darkness...so I loved every bit of it...wonderful!

[ChaoticSoul]

Nice use of descriptor words. This poem reminded me of Sweeney Todd :) Very well written. I also like your use of making the words bigger and bold; it really makes it stand out well.

[Lily Mae]

This made me feel like I was standing right there watching it all happen.. I could feel the emotion has he wiped the blood under his eyes and the way it made him feel... wow intense as always Josh.. I'm loving it..xo

[realmwriter]

Rich and gory in fantastic detail...! Beautiful

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Wickedly Dark! Tasting iron crimson raindrops!

[Cassie Fraga]

wwwhoooaaa.... that gave me chills brah... nice write!!!

[Seshat Nidaba]

What a clownish brilliant title, sounds like you have a plot tucked under your sleeve. Happy writing!

[tanaya]

This is great! I love it! It is a tad short but it tells the message love it!