daydream

01/2012

I've pushed through the weeping branches

that grow out of the foliage surrounding your heart, 

I've stood among the yellow aspens and red maples 

that grow within our dusty memories, 

from time to time I've walked the beaten paths 

winding to and from certain moments

portrayed on these frayed pages, 

hoping to catch a glimpse of you, in a memory perhaps

somewhere forgotten, 

I will wait for you

Author's Note

Thanks to Emily Burns for helping with the format.

Reviews

[Tristan]

The imagery your words evoke is simply delightful: they have lots of texture, and the sound of nature with them. You use words in a deceptively simple way and it shows no sign of forced appearance; everything fits. I do believe, however, that this poem could benefit from being broke up - all of the commas and no periods to break it into sentences makes you feel as if you have to read it all in one breath. But other than that, wonderful work.

[olla]

beautiful..

[WhiteWillow]

I love the way you entertwine love and nature with your words. Seamless anaolgies, very well written. Thanks for sharing

[taylorrose]

your picture is pretty i wish i knew a place that looked liike that. i love the poem makes me feel like it was my daydream

[Arielle Ann]

I loved the vivid images- yellow aspens, red maples associated with dusty memories....this was rich and colorful :)

[Thea]

Beautiful imagery...I love the picture...It fits the whole piece very well...You've shown such creativity in this poem...
:)))

[BlueDreams]

Oh! its apparently a great write.. Trees ,nature related to the lost love .. sounds saddening .. Great job .. :-)