deathwish

01/2012

When

stained window panes 

light crumbling hallways

stretched down to a sad

synthesized resemblance

of myself

When

smoke clings to the already

sweltering and hanging air

that hangs like dust,

choking fragile lungs and

killing hearts

 

When

I awake to reality, beset 

with oxygen tank futures 

and chemotherapy, surrounded 

by generations that don't 

understand me

When 

death walks hand in hand

with what remains of my

depleted resources and

inanimate dreams, agonized 

by grief 

When

flies surround my decaying body

and fallen angels search this

plane frantically for my soul,

will I still reach for the tobacco

and for the green

probably so

Author's Note

Reviews

[patricia]

You got this across realy well. My mum died when I was ten, her heavy smoking killed her. You'd think I would have stayed well away from nicotine, but I guess as a child breathing in the stuff I was probably already addicted. Unlike alcohol and drugs, nicotine is slightly more socially acceptable, and a nicotine addict as less chance of a recovery, because the rock bottom they have to hit is usually only when it is destroying their health. Whereas drugs and alcohol take some to prisons and other dark places and perhaps the consequences are more of an incentive to recovery. Nicotine is a subtle killer in many ways. Thanks. (sight) (I hate it when I get on my soap box...sorry.

[EMF]

I'll take the smoke but pass the green. Cup of black for preference. One Hell of a poem. Marvelously dark, but with that special warmth and light that darkness must have to be seen properly. Great job. And the Camel suits it perfectly.

[Pratik]

Its nice joshua...even though i dont see it as a celebration of death...but i can see it is an innermost reflection of our perception of death.. Well written :)

[SkinlessFrank]

A nice, well rounded treatment of death in all its glory.....nice because you tip toe around death's frontiers, which makes this piece all the more powerful and teasing.

[Alana McGuire]

I really enjoyed this. It was written in a beautifully dark sense. Then I reached the bottom and it made me chuckle a bit. I've never smoked before and I don't plant to, but I hear it's quite the addiction.

[Aidz]

This is a great write Joshua I would have to say the best I read from ya... for that you can share some Candied Corn with Rene ;)

This is brilliant Josh, always love your wording so much! you are one of the bests who can explain some subjects others run for... Excellent job, xx

[ducky(:]

i admire all of your work, i really like this one,

[Rene Velez]

Ah the evil cancer stick, here in the city we click them "Bones" a tough habit to kick, trust me I know, been battling the war since 19, great write, love the visuals.

[Cassie Fraga]

haha!!! great write Josh!! I love your free verses the best... you have a great way of getting the message across... well done!!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Good write. Though tobacco is bad for people, yet they do it anyway.....That would be a terrible reality...but then again that is a drug...they are all powerful. I loved the message. Great imagery too. I loved it. Thanks for sharing.