breakthrough

06/2012

a contrast of colors grace my sight

as I wipe your murk from my eyes

am I am truly seeing for the first time 

gasping heavily,  I rip at the extensions

of your reach,  pulling myself out of

varlet mentalities and dead errors

weights slide off my back like water

while transitioning from your black

stage set to demoralize the broken

I can breathe with a smile and a sigh

the flowers reach up to me as blue

rushes to fill my once stormy gray

the sun is now shining as I walk away

birds chirp in harmony with every  

step and the breeze feels like gold

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

Is that you up there in this vid? What an adorable young man you are/were/are. Highly doubtful that "adorable" was the look you were going for, but as I am many years your elder I get to say it anyway. This poem of yours here - there is light and hope within which is in contrast to the dark pictures you often paint. I really appreciate all of them, but it IS nice to see a glimpse of your light every now and again. Emotive as all of your works are, but I like the strength you've found and described in this one. :)

[poeticpiers]

Hope springs eternally we carry on against the odds.
I like your style

I really enjoyed reading this! You have such a beautiful writing style. "weights slide off my back like water" < I really like that line, it creates amazing imagery. Thank you for sharing :)

[Larry Dyson]

love this phrase set..."am I am truly seeing for the first time




gasping heavily, I rip at the extensions

of your reach, pulling myself out of

varlet mentalities and dead errors"

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

a very optimistic and hopeful poem...

and the stanza
"birds chirp in harmony with every
step and the breeze feels like gold"
is totally out of this world :)

[Raven Starhawk]

Purely enticing in way of penning. I have truly been captivated by these words you craft so well.

[*** Hey Jude***]

You have done it again my friend! I like the variation as you express good times, and times that seem oh so hard.
I am truly seeing for the first time"
This poem is full of inspiration.
"birds chirp in harmony with every  
step and the breeze feels like gold"
Wonderful Write ~ :-)

[IAmGhost120]

I love your use of verbs; they give the poem the feel of action. It lets the reader know that you're actually moving and that there really is a change occurring. I love the way you express the shift from dark to light to reach for a new beginning. Excellent.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I do like the how it went from dark to light. It was an excellent write. I loved the piece. Great write as always. I love your work, Josh. Thanks for sharing.

[Dark Poetry]

Another gentle dark poem from your heart, good job, I liked it.