Where?

I wriggle, fidgit, and squirm

in your gaze

Your eyes burning holes in my soul

you smile, snicker, and laugh at me

and yet, I am invisible

 

I feel your wrath pounding me by the second

your jokes are pulling my hair

i am in an escapable hell

But, I am still unseen.

 

 

Reviews

[Persephone]

This one is going in my favorites - It is amazing how someone can make you feel as if you don't matter - Just with simple looks and words, you have described it vividly here - great job

[Kerri Hart]

thank you

[Pax]

short and very nice... its seems a hard situation but still unseen...

[Kerri Hart]

ahh yes...
thank you so much :)

[Aaron]

That is powerful. That first like is perfect. Just readin wriggle, fidget, and squirm makes me, sort of, tweak out.

It reminds me of that weird sort of self-judgement that I used to inflict on myself. I'd feel like everyone hates me despite the fact that they probably didn't even care enough to see me. I seemed to prefer being disliked than completely invisible.

I don't know if that's anything like what you were going for but it definitely tapped into some emotional point for me.

Thanks for sharing.

[Kerri Hart]

hahaha same, prob why i wrote that line xD

i would disaagree with tht, i don't enjoi being disliked i'd rather b the insvisible gurl no one knows

many viewpoints, it your interpretsation,,thank you so much :D

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I love those last two lines, such a powerful emotional write.

[Kerri Hart]

thank you :D

[That_Girl]

Love the last bit... 'jokes pulling my hair' and all... that's really good. Difficult when someone or something has such control over you. Nice!

[Kerri Hart]

thank you!

[Peaceworker22]

Talk about GHOSTRIDER here, it's like the Penance Stare! Good work Josi!

[Kerri Hart]

hahaha im glad you liked it
-K.J. Pennington

[SilentDreamer]

This reminds me of bullies- how they can make you feel like you're constantly watched but at the same time worthless and not deserving of time. I wonder though if in this line, " I wriggle, fidget, and screrm" You mean squirm? Still overlooking grammar I love this poem! It's vivid and clear with a good ending. Great write!

[Kerri Hart]

YES sqirm! i mean sqirm! hahaha i spent forEVER trying to remember how to spell that word! thank you!

[Peaceworker22]

Squirm silly, squirm like a worm! Jk. Don't forget z u!

[Kerri Hart]

:}

[Dark Tower]

That first stanza is nothing short of magical. A very beautiful piece.

[Kerri Hart]

thank you im glad you enjoyed it :)