It wouldn't be right

Dwelling on each slight

Another reason keeping me up at night

Try to pass it off

Shrugging off the despite

Seeing a chance

Beautiful sight

Changes taken

Offering a new light

Still wondering

Should this be delight

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

This new suit looks good on you. Except, you are still in your funk. Papaya needs to return from the deep dark words and help us with our silly poem.:)

[Jon Roggie]

This was an experiment in form. Emotions are still going to show through. Off to the beach for a couple of days, and the waves should cheer me up.

[barleygirl]

I have this same experience in recent years . . . it seems like all the warm fuzzy experiences with people close to me have turned into vapor. Trying not to take this as a slight, but rather as an opening for some new as-yet-unknown delight. Even tho your words are sparse, they are filled with meaning that I can relate to strongly (((HUGS)))

[Jon Roggie]

Thank you. This was an attempt at writing a ghazul. Shabeeh Haider explained the format, and I decided to give it a try. Feelings behind it? Those are going to show through no matter how I write them. Hug returned!

[barleygirl]

Yes, I've read many of Shabeeh's ghazals . . . but I didn't recognize this form in your poem. Maybe it's becuz your message is the main focus (a good thing).

[Shabeeh Haider]

It's a fine attempt Jon. You have used small phrases and each line is deep in meaning.
Nicely done.

[Jon Roggie]

I felt like making the attempt. Normally, I write in a free form style. Thank you for introducing me to this form.