The hand you use

Lost in a moment tired.

  

   That is awful.

 

Time to move along.

To be clear,

 the first line was terrible.

Well,

  I might be able to use it.

Could even be a touch.

I guess we have to clean it up a bit.

Maybe this should be the write.

Lost,

  in a moment tired.

Seems to make more sense.

On to the second line!

Reviews

[Corset]

I am often lost in a tired moment, wondering who to believe and not wanting to believe in anything other than what I want to so desperately believe but on either hand, it doesn't look so good for me, lol, or maybe I just don't want to believe any more because I'm lost in the moment tired.

[Jon Roggie]

This is why you move along to the second line!

[Corset]

lol, that is awful!

[Chris Shaw]

You've just captured my thoughts as I set out to write a poem.

Chris

[Jon Roggie]

This is when you are supposed to shut down all electronic devices, and get back to the book you keep meaning to read.

[Lyn Anderson]

Just a thought.
lost,
In a moment;
tired.
Love ya.

[Jon Roggie]

I can see your view.
I like the quirky rhythm.
I still prefer the original line.

[Lyn Anderson]

But of course. The poem has a tone like it's posing a question as to which way it should go

[Jon Roggie]

I like my odd mixes.