Broken Bits

How am I

supposed to learn to love

when everyone I love is drifting

They drift like the broken bits of boats

torn off by the wind that blows them away

The broken bits are blown away

from me

Reviews

[Firebird]

I feel your pain. My children are drifting free and I feel like a broken boat myself at times. I'm even living on a boat at present so it's more than just imagery.

[V]

Beautiful images and lovely expressed poem. Also sad but your words are on point. I really enjoyed reading.

[Jupiter]

Thank you so much!

[V]

You're welcome.

[Solar]

Blown away by the sadness of this poem - like a shipwreck of heartbreak.

[Jupiter]

Thank you so much. And that's an incredible metaphor!

[Solar]

You are welcome

[-inactive now-]

This is really good, the imagery it paints in my mind is very vivid. I can strongly sense the heartfelt sadness in your words..

[Jupiter]

Thank you for that lovely comment, and thank you for reading (:

[A hare off]

Reading this poem is like viewing a seascape painting in grey and charcoal lonely brushstrokes. It touches the heart and expresses such deep emotion. As a reader, I could feel this poem. Very good writing.

[Jupiter]

Wow. That is a beautiful connection. And I am glad it made you feel something. Thank you so much for reading, and thank you for reviewing!

[Joey K]

I love short and powerful poems. They make you wanna read them thousands of times. I love the ship metaphor

[Jupiter]

Thank you again! Glad you liked it (:

[Firebird]

I really like this. Bleak and sad image of loss. I hope the wind dies down and your broken boats can use their anchors.

[Jupiter]

Thank you again - and that metaphor is fabulous. I hope so too.

[Carolynn]

This is a very touching poem of the sadness we feel when we lose those that we love. I hope love comes to stay soon!

[Jupiter]

Thank you so much, Cahar. You made my day!