Dawning on Me

You create a new dawn with the sound of your voice
Candy colored skies painted with every word
Strewn out clouds with a whisper
Sunset begins with your lips
Moonrise in your eyes
Shooting stars in your kiss
But a black hole in your heart
That my dawns, my skys, my clouds
Can not fill
God no matter how hard I try
My candy colored skies are not enough
The shooting stars just fizzle out
My dawns just don't measure up
And I find
That as you create a new day for me at the sound of your voice
I have not made one sun rise for you
I pray you find
Someone
Who pushes a whole galaxy into existence
With one exhale of their lungs
And you revel in it as much as I did in
Your every dawn

Reviews

[Elwyn]

You f*****g suck for writing this.

I hate feelings, and you make me have them. And this poem captures inadequacy TOO WELL. Uncomfortably well. I feel like everybody has these as their deepest darkest thoughts at some point or another, the feeling of not being good enough for the person we love. I like the selfless twist in the end though, that they find someone who is as amazing to them as they were to you. Stunning. Always.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

This physically hurt me in the end. Great Job.