you and me

yoooooooooooooooooouuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu

you and me 

just like moon and cloud,

your beauty is your moonlight,,

my wealth is monsoon,

your eyes is disastrous

because whenever you see me ,

it flood my world

with beauty and moon juice,

with salty food of love,

the love may not in the love of  love,

may not in love of love

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Despite a grammatical error or two, the concept of your message is well-stated & original. You've selected imaginative comparisons to show how it feels, which is very relatable for most people. Such expressions as "salty food" & "moon juice" are quite provocative, as far as conjuring up new ideas about the feelings. I'm not sure what the last 2 lines mean, but it's an interesting idea.

Line 5: "your eyes is" . . . should be "are"
Line 7: "it flood" . . . should be "floods"

[writ rajat]

Thanks dear I will correct it

[Manasa.L]

Very nice, I loved the last lines and moon juice. beautifully written

[Poetic License]

"Your beauty if your moonlight." This was such a beautiful sentiment. It caught me right away.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

So sweet and honest :) I really like the phrase "moon juice". Wonderful imagery!!!

[APOORVA]

Love in all.
very well written :)
Keep up, also to mention-
because whenever you see me ,
it flood my world
with beauty and moon juice,
with salty food of love,
the love may not in the love of love,
YOU HAVE JUST NAILED THIS PIECE WITH THESE LINES

[writ rajat]

Thanks you apoorva