Sublime Joys

Forsooth, a roller-coaster day at hard,
With all his might, Zeus had played,
As pearls of drops crashed apart,
In fierce rage on hills they laid.

I wobbled on the streets in woe,
Run for my bread.. Run for fame,
Who is a friend ? Who is a foe ?
In quest of truth and holy flame.

Nay, 'tis not a life but a WAR,
Ay, with self and every dominant voice,
Alas ! Caught a glimpse not so far,
Of a retarded skull in great rejoice.

His wrenched nerves were in glee,
As oblivious as a mystic infant,
My petty spirit drowned in life's sea,
His dogged dazzle won over my rant.

Bravo ! His smiles didn't falter in weary weather,
Making me thus live anew : in a world with 'salt and pepper'

Reviews

[WingsToFly]

Nice piece. Thanks for sharing :)

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks

[kelvin]

nicely written read here for like the end of this read you added some salt and pepper to the stew of words you have here tastes pretty good to hahaha as always keep writing fellow writer again nice read here.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Lol thank yous

[kelvin]

You're very welcome

[CharlyeMonroe]

I agree with John, this is my favorite piece I have read on here so far. It's nice to come back after a weeks departure and read something as wonderfully structured and creatively penned as this.

[Ahmad Cox]

I love the playfulness of thus poem. It makes me happy

[Kajal Gulabani]

Many thanks

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This has to be my favourite piece for me. This is such a good poem Kajal.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Wow.. M glad. Many thanks John .

[STRAND]

The skull stanzas were decent, but most of the piece has almost a robotically-generated quality to it; where one puts a quarter in a machine and the device spits out a poem. I have trouble with the forced archaic diction.

Regards,

STRAND

[Kajal Gulabani]

Cool !

[quinfinn]

interesting and very well written piece. i think i read it three times before i felt the actual rhythm but it does work once you get it, it is just not so very obvious, which is why i find this interesting and unique. very nicely penned!

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank yous :)

[Frieda P]

Wow!! Just WOW! This is freaking amazing...I first saw that pic and thought it was going to be all flowery and sugar, then I got to the nitty gritty meat of the piece...ouch. Ended up in a lovely gift of hope, you spin a lovely tale with your poetry. Brava! One of my favorites...

[Kajal Gulabani]

Super duper review Frieda.. M sooooo very happy. Thanks cute hrt :)