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Run Along Sentence

At the moment, I am in horrible, terrible pain and my thoughts are the bricks tied tight to my brain, taking me down down down to a bottomless sea that I have filled to the brim simply because I haven't a speck of control to stop my childish whines that keep falling in the hands of a spider that is ready to eat my mind and finally put me out of this mess I've been brought in for no real reason or rhyme but for the pure enjoyment for the watchers with their curious, wide eyes that delight in spotting such deep deep despair, both emotionally and physically, caught completely unaware in a web like a fly trying so so much not to repeat her wish while she is sinking in a bottomless, never-ending pit of sea salty tears that just will not quit.

Author's Note

Hello, WritersCafe.org! I am very excited to share my scribbles with all of you! I look forward to all your critiques, comments, and hopefully praises. Thank you for reading!

Best,
Kara Marissa O.

Reviews

[Frieda P]

I adore your exhaustively long sentence, it drags on the flavor of this piece...salty and whimpering for release. Kudos!

[kara_marissa]

Thank you so very much for reading, Frieda! I'm glad you enjoyed.

[Frieda P]

The pleasure was mine.

[Just me]

I really like this, so rich with description, you really have a talent with words :)

[kara_marissa]

I'm flattered! Thank you for reading!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

hello, Kara!
welcome aboard :)
nice one, though written in prose form, still touchy
reminds me of one of my own
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/AdamLebzo/1110545/

we are delighted to have you

[kara_marissa]

Thank you for the clear up! I'm very glad to find others with a similar style! Thank you for reading! Best of luck!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you for writing