Sun down

inspired by someone who told me that their thoughts at night are terrifying

And when the light of dawn hits the morning dew on the soldiered blades of grass scattered on my front lawn, All the thoughts of the night before wash away as if non existent

Almost as if night time is a completely different, parallel universe
that I didn’t ask to enter.
And the sun is my knight and shining armor that shines its light on the demons itself.

But before I have time to breathe the sun is setting once again and once again I’m being pulled into a place where light doesn’t exist, not physically or mentally.

Reviews

[Saddam]

Dark and Light, Win and Defeat, Hope and Loss
Beautifully point on that dear poet.
Like it....

[krystle]

thank you!

[SmittyJas]

Beauty of the dark and the light the creator of earth and sun and moon light has given to us a wondrous place a space of heaven and too see into the stars above and a wonder of the eye shall appear a Lord's Blessing to this Children all over this land. Great poetry if I ever read any before.

[krystle]

thank you for this review! well chosen words thank you :)

[Leslie Philibert]

A fine prose fragment that ( maybe ) needs a revised layout, but the imagery is great..

[krystle]

thank you!

[MomzillaNC]

Intriguing themes…

NOTES: Maybe the lines would track better if you broke them into short stanzas instead of one long running line
I recommend increasing the font size

[krystle]

I did that originally but I felt it ran weird, i'm going to try again thank you!

[MomzillaNC]

My notes are only suggestions. Yours is the poet's voice. I usually try to break the lines where my own poems break when I read them aloud.

[krystle]

I like your suggestions and hm okay that does make sense thank you!

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. I'm hope it's helpful.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

glorious sun!!!
well written!!!
i liked it!!!
:)

[krystle]

thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem had a lot of hidden story. You gave a overview of thoughts and emotion. I like the want to keep the sun alive and shining. The ending left the reader with question. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[krystle]

you're always so kind thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome and I always enjoy your poetry.