your colors

where did you disappear to? wherever it is, you took them with you.

the sunset tonight was wild. I wish you could have seen it. the way I did, I mean. Because you see, the different shades of pink reminded me of the way you laughed at my cheeks and my denial of blushing. And the orange, reminded me of the time you told me you saw a fie of wonder in my eyes, so I closed them, and tried to feel that fire, that really, i'm sure you only imagined. Because when I opened my eyes, these colors were gone, the darkness took it's place, and i'm still trying to figure out if I mean the darkness of the sky or the darkness of you not being here. 

please don't let my eyes remain vacant. 

Reviews

[Abhishek Izy]

Awww this is co cute. Yes, there's a sheet of pain between the lines but it's still cute in its own ways. The colors, oh now I'll look at them in a better way

[SuspectGray]

Yes, love can color your world and take it away. The colors are real for your love....whether you can see them or not. Enjoyed ( : O )

[Mayank]

It's short but very emotive. The comparison of the sunset with the person you missing is deadly cold.

[krystle]

glad you enjoyed thank you!

[SmittyJas]

I see great meaning for this poem see all you can see in your lovers eyes. Colors Hues and important stuff my be gone when your eye go shut. Open uP and talk your questions through.

[krystle]

thanks so much!

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, and reminds me how fine prose-poetry can be..

[krystle]

thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and sad poem.
"Because when I opened my eyes, these colors were gone, the darkness took it's place, and i'm still trying to figure out if I mean the darkness of the sky or the darkness of you not being here. "
I liked the above lines. Sometime better to hide in darkness till we are ready for the light. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[krystle]

thank you for sharing your kind review!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[MomzillaNC]

Vivid recollections and imagery

NOTES: I recommend another pass for copy edits

[krystle]

I'm sorry explain your note?

[MomzillaNC]

There are some tweaks and corrections needed. For example, "…you saw a [fie] of wonder…?"

[Haley Wilson]

Beautiful! Sunsets are one of my favorite things in the world and you captured that imagery very well in this poem. I love how you related it to the natural emotions of a person as well.

[krystle]

Thank you!

[Saddam]

And the orange, reminded me of the time you told me you saw a fie of wonder in my eyes, so I closed them, and tried to feel that fire, that really, i'm sure you only imagined.

It is beautiful write friend.
Quite lovely.