Playing the Part

Sickly sweet like golden silk

honey drips off of the actress’s tongue

words unfamiliar

her pride is a headlight’s glow

a place she’s been before

 

Among sweet cityscape

Streams of light and honey and rain

Dancing over street-lit riverbeds

She performs in a different spotlight

She never told you where she went

her fingertips drip sweat

syrup spills from transmissions

she wants to taste

Reviews

[dan]

Kaylee, Wow! If my first sample of your writing is anything like the rest I believe I want to sign up right now to be the president of your fan club (as long as I don't have to wear a stupid hat.) Your writing produces vivid imagery, which you then take and crash it violently into other imagery. I LIKE that!! If that is 'your style,' copywrite it...no, do it now! I am happy to accept you as a friend. Please send me read requests; I get so many that it's hard to visit friends' pages to see if there's anything new. I PROMISE I review ALL read requests. Now you have to review one of mine. Or if not...well, I don't know exactly what happens. I guess I'm just a little pissed? Nice to have 'met you.' take care...dan

[Kaylee April]

Thank you so much! :) I do tend to use that as my style. I'd be happy to review one of your writings.

[pastelroses]

Wow what a great poem. The imagery was used to well that I could picture what you were saying. It is a short piece but is strong and effective. Great job!

[Sleeper Note]

I like this. Appeals to the senses. Tickles the mind. One note: Typo in stanza 2, line 5. I think you mean "where she went." Dig the content and the style. Cheers!

[Kaylee April]

thank you! :) didn't catch that thanks for the feedback