The Beam of Light

Among all the chaos there definitely a beam of hope even thoughit looks faint

Every where I look.

There are signs of a struggle,

The mails has been scattered

All over the kitchen floor.

Milks overturned

The phone has been knocked off

its pedestal, its battery pack

hanging loose from an umbilicus of wires

Some sparrows are as chirpy

As in an Indian Railway platform

There is a single beam of Light

At the other end

though meticulously fainted

And some whispers at the threshold,

"There's a good time coming my friend"

Reviews

[Arachne.]

I really enjoy the imagery that is created here, and the mystery

[Lively]

Nice, very nice. Please write the next part of the poem too.

[Forfatter]

Very descriptive. Makes me curious as to what happened to cause the struggle :-)

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Lovely, descriptive, vivid write. Nicely done.

[Becky C Strukamp]

"There's a good time coming my friend" love this line. Very nice poem!

[Ruth]

See, this to me is perfect love, nothing needed! lol
I really like the positiveness and the whisper at the end..well thought out and leaves the reader feeling optimistic...that some light can be found, so this works well!
xx

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I like the message of hope at the end.

[BlackCl0ud]

A poem I lost myself in, I can see exactly what you provide and can also fill in the blanks with my own desire. From the beginning you paint a dark image yet you give us hope at the end. ~ BlackCl0ud

[Kyla H]

Very good imagery, it shows that there is some hope though.