Deep in the sea

Love should be more deep than the sea

Lips parted fresh from the fire

Touched each other with the delicate desire

The unrestrained waves active in the mouth

Lips smoothened its move towards south

The epochal dreams are made and broken

The mighty castles in the air shaken

The souls agitated to a higher rage

What the ultimate

The destiny is under the blaze

And blissfully everything receded to a haze

And the world turned into a new phase

Reviews

[Clever Forever]

this is great, i liked the rhythm.

[Amila Jay]

Very very nice. A good read. Wonderful write:)

[Sagar Waingankar]

It clearly describes the idea behind writing this one. Easy to grasp words and a simple write symbols of a excellent poem.

[Just Me]

It had nice flow, good job!

[fairygirl2468]

I really like this piece. It's very figuratively wrote and there's so much emotion put into it. Its as if I can feel everything you describe.

[Ripple of Aqua]

Seemingly simple and easy to read piece, it was like slipping from one cloud to another. Great job.

[Ruth]

Your imagery is flawless here love! A beautiful display of how it should be, gorgeous! xoxo

[KAREN]

really an enjoyable read. Well crafted!!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

the best of yours I have ever read. Love you my sweet friend!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Very nice picture you used for the poem. As for the poem itself; nice rhyming. I like the last two lines as well as this line here:
"The mighty castles in the air shaken"