When The World Flies By

You sit there with that dazed look in your eye

slowly letting the world fly by

so give me your hand and come with me

I will show you the world and all it has for us to see

open your heart and take a chance

let this world be the floor for our spotlight dance

take a step with me and let our love soar

because these feelings are something I never felt before

take me for my benefits and take me for my flaws

because the dazed look is all I saw

I walked past you while the world flew by,

this memory is all just a story that lies behind my eyes.

Reviews

[Black]

so sad,
a missed love,
but standing open for love,
is even harder,
dont reject it always, or you might miss the true love you ar looking for .

I like the last sentence
It is really strong
and this memory is all just a story that lies behind my eyes.

Work on the lay out a little bit?
and the choice of words here and there and it would be perfect
Regards
Black

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww. Quite melancholy this is.. I liked it! Nicely done! A love that passed by is hard.. but waiting openly for love is even more difficult sometimes. You hit the emotions right on the spot. =) Great write!

[Fran Marie]

rather sad, yet penned with a good rhyme scheme thru~out....nicely donE!

[Libby]

Sad, but well written. Really good rhyming there. c:

[ken burke]

ty for the review and yea i havent got the full grasp on the words yet