where are you?

where are you?

in this home?.....in this town?....in this life?

hey..

my lost love

where are you?

still

the streets smell your steps

and, the birds sing your love song

but

you are so far away

hey...

my lost love

where are you?

are you in my heart?

I don't know....

Reviews

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) Love this piece, it is very raw and honest. good illustration and vivid. Keep writing!

[keyvan]

...Thank you....

[.......]

I enjoyed the depth in this write.

[keyvan]

thank you.....:)

[Junert]

I feel the same way. Where are you, Uprising?

[keyvan]

still

the streets smell your steps

[Junert]

Are you in my heart?

[keyvan]

I don't know

[Junert]

Lol

[keyvan]

Are you in my heart???

[Junert]

You are in my heart.

[Leslie Philibert]

I enjoyed this, a poem that packs a lot of depth in a very readable frame, very good.

[keyvan]

thank you....

[AWickedMoon]

Love it, you can feel "lostness" within it.

[Anna]

I love the poem. The artsy layout of it gives it a nice flow and makes it read very nicely.
"The streets smell your steps" is a great imagery line that plays on unique senses.
The only thing I say that took away from this art would have be to the over use of periods. I think a proper use of spacing would be suffice and give a better look to it. Personally. Take from it if you like, in the end this is still a great piece :)

[keyvan]

thank you....thank you very much

[Scarlet Alice]

short, simple and really nice :) it can be a song lyrics I think :)

[The Nameless]

i love the way it's honest. No fancy words, no capitals, just your bare feelings.

[dunnia]

very nice i love the flow

[keyvan]

thank you..

[Holly Mason]

smells your steps really like that line
thank you for sharing

[keyvan]

thank you...