It's beautiful standing for you

today..

I have been cleaning the window and I see the snowy street through the dusty glass.that tree ,that rock and memories were all there except you...

I take the pencil and painting everything in grey except your dried, red flower..

today..

 I have been cleaning the window,again and again and again...

It's beautiful standing for you.

 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Your emotions really display themselves in amazing phrases, not flowery, fussy words but real words as if being said directly to someone precious. That line .. 'I have been cleaning the window,again and again and again...' is near heartbreaking.

[creativequill]

this was a wonderful piece, very emotional, solid and strong, great job :)

[Isabelle Howard]

This is amazing!

[keyvan]

thank you....

[Isabelle Howard]

You're very welcome.

[Scarlet Alice]

short but you got the message there... really good.

[Holly Mason]

lovely write
thank you for sharing

[Junert]

It's a nice and short piece, though with spelling errors.

[keyvan]

please tell me the errors.thank you

[KurKota]

I notice the few spelling suggestions below in the previous review.... so won't say more of that.... I like the piece overall, nice, albeit sad thought. An obvious loss that haunts you..... Nice ecpression.

[keyvan]

thank you Kurkota

[Mehak Mushtaq]

"expect " - except.
"I see the snowy street through the dusty glass"
"That tree, that rock and old memories were all there except you"
"I take the pencil and paint everything in grey except your dried, red flower."

These are just some suggestion you could use. Beautiful idea. :)

[keyvan]

we are friend that's why I need your help because English is my fourth language and I need for your helping in it....thnk you.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Exactly, we are friends and we're here to help each other. Whenever you need my help, just ask. :) Anytime.

[keyvan]

thank you..